when everything else fails

Sweet Embrace

in the rain

let worlds melt in pattering drops
yet aches these two pounding hearts
may the pain for once blur away
in these soothing heavenly tears

just for one final moment
all memories of yesterdays
let them fade away
let them please give way

just for one final embrace
before reality shatters
our castles of sand
and tears us apart

as a tsunami wave
time shall finally come
when worlds shall make us part
with eyes raining tears we depart

written for the prompt Poets United The Thursday Think Tank #67 – Rain


10 responses

  1. Laurie Kolp

    Beautiful… I especially like the last stanza.

    September 23, 2011 at 9:26 pm

  2. Wow, so much emotion, beautiful and sad! It has a haunted feel…we do walk around with relationship ghosts, don’t we~

    September 23, 2011 at 9:53 pm

  3. Old Ollie

    very cool poem – it feels authentic

    thanks so much for the kind comments, very encouraging – I’ll drop in again.

    September 24, 2011 at 3:16 am

  4. This is such a beautiful love poem ….

    September 24, 2011 at 4:25 am

  5. Poignant poem, one we can probably all relate to at one time or another. You’ve done a great job of invoking memories and feelings of such a bittersweet time… my heart resonates with past experiences.

    September 24, 2011 at 4:28 am

  6. You captured that very romantic moment before the lovers leave. Sad poignant scene…well done ~

    September 24, 2011 at 7:20 am

  7. So sweet…


    September 24, 2011 at 11:30 pm

  8. I liked the use of the rain metaphor. “let worlds melt in pattering drops” “yet aches these two pounding hearts”. Such a beautiful line. Please keep writing.

    September 25, 2011 at 6:41 am

  9. I love the weather metaphors. I have always felt that emotion and passion are almost weather-like. Tsunami, rain, drops…all lend a very unpredictable, powerful undertone to this piece. Great work.

    September 26, 2011 at 7:27 am

  10. the sweetest embrace, a final one… Lovely, simply lovely words… xPenx

    September 26, 2011 at 4:53 pm

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